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Writers’ Groups

I’ve never belonged to a face-to-face writers’ group, mainly because I haven’t found one that suits my needs, yet.  However I do belong to three different online writers’ groups.  You’ll find them listed on the right side of this blog, if you scroll down.

Writers’ groups can be great.  They’re a place for support, which all of us occasionally need.  They’re a great place to learn about the ins and outs of this business, especially if they have members at all levels–beginners new enough to ask all the questions and veterans experienced enough to have some of the answers.

Still there are different kinds of writers’ groups, even online.  I’m a member of a brand new writers’ group (literally, the forum only started at the end of August), and so far it is completely awesome.  We’re divided up into smaller groups based on our interests–novels or short stories, genre, etc.  It’s possible to belong to more than one group.  I’m currently in a group focusing on young adult fantasy novels.  It’s a new experience, getting critiques only from people who are interested in the same kind of writing I am.  I love it.

I am amazed at the quality of writing, story ideas, and critiques in this group so far.  I predict that in five years at least one of us will be published.  Hope it’s me.

Revisions

There are revisions and then there are revisions.  I’m in the middle of two different kinds of revision right now. 

On MAGE STORM, I’m starting the second pass through of the second draft.  Technically, that’s a revision, although what I expect to look for and correct in this draft has already resulted in more than 10,000 new words.  It’s at least as much new writing as it is revision of what’s already written.  I think I may add as much as 5,000 more in this pass.  In fact, this pass is the first in which I’m really going to look at what’s already there, because I have some critiques on the first three chapters.  Other than that, I’ll be looking for places where I tell what should be shown or where I need to add to the descriptions or provide more internal monologue.

On DREAMER’S ROSE, I’m working through the revisions from an ongoing chapter exchange.  DREAMER’S ROSE is actually in a very odd place right now.  I’m working on the chapter exchange and the suggestions are improving the story immensely.  I did six chapters this week, which filled a couple of plot holes and fixed a couple of places where I just didn’t make the characters work hard enough.  I actually did add one scene and beef up some world-building description, but it’s often as much about what I delete as what I add.

On the other hand, these chapter revisions have also shown me that this one is going to need a much heavier revision, especially in the early chapters.  I’ve all but decided to make this YA.  It’s really close anyway.  Most of the story only needs a few tweaks.  The beginning, which needs the heaviest revision anyway, is the part that will have to change the most, because the novel currently starts with an older character, not the YA character.  Part of me is starting to get really excited about those changes.  I’m getting the itch to start, but I’m going to hold off until the chapter exchange is complete.

Second Draft

I finished the first pass on the second draft of MAGE STORM.  It’s just over 50,000 words, now.  I’m taking a break from it for a day or two, doing chapter revisions on DREAMER’S ROSE.  Then I’ll go back for a second pass.  I’m still calling this the second draft.

In the first pass, I had a number of things marked in the text where I wanted to add material, often whole scenes.  In fact, there are two whole new chapters.  In the second pass, I’ll take a closer look, specifically for:

  1. Places where I need to add more detail to the setting.  Try to involve more than just one of the five senses.
  2. Places, especially near the beginning, where I need to get deeper penetration into the main character’s point of view.
  3. Places where I need to show, rather than tell.  I’m pretty sure I’ve got a couple of passage-of-time type places where I could find a better way to show it.

That pass will complete the second draft.  Then it’ll be time to start finding readers.  (Well, in fact, I already have.)

New Character Page

Since I didn’t talk about writing at all yesterday, I added a new character to the Characters page.  Meet Mastan from MAGE STORM.

Awful August

I write this post with a touch of trepidation.  I’m not sure if I’m tempting fate or not.  You see, my awful August actually started the last week in July and it’s carried over into the beginning of September.  I just hope it’s finally over.

It started at the end of July when the water main broke.  My water main, not the city’s.  That means I’m responsible for fixing it.  We were three days without regular running water. 

Then we had a strange occurance.  This isn’t particularly awful, just weird.  A comorant roosted in my jacaranda tree for a full day.  Now, I’m at least five miles from the ocean and there isn’t anything that remotely resembles a pond.  What is a water bird doing in my yard at all?  Towards the end, it became obvious something was wrong with the bird.  Turns out, wildlife rescue in my area (at least the ones that deal with water birds) need you to bring the bird to them.  This thing had a wicked looking five-inch hooked beak!  Finally, my nephew and I managed to get it into a dog carrier and get it to wildlife rescue.  Diagnosis:  It was just an old bird.

Then one of my dogs started having trouble with his mouth.  Always very food driven, suddenly Micah was tentative about taking treats and slow to eat his food.  It took three trips to the vet and three courses of (expensive) antibiotics to finally find the foxtail that had gotten stuck in the back of his mouth and burried itself about an inch deep. 

Meanwhile, during all this time, the house has shifted.  It’s probably because of all the rain we had last winter.  That’s just one of the joys of living in an old house.  In this case, it means that the back door doesn’t close properly.  I have to slam it hard enough to rattle the windows if I want to have a chance of locking it.  There’s not much to do but wait until the house settles back.  If I shave a little bit off the door so it will close now, there’ll be a gap when it moves again.  Usually, the movements aren’t this dramatic, but as I said, we had a lot of rain last winter.

Then, on Mom’s birthday, no less, the sewer main broke.  Again, mine, not the city’s.  The plumber wanted $8,000 to fix it.  Might as well say $8,000,000, because I don’t have it.  Fortunately, my nephew and my cousin were able to take care of it for $35 in parts and lunch. 

That same day, I got my jury duty summons. 

And, on the second of September, just to prove August wasn’t completely over, my other dog started walking on three legs.  Another vet trip and another vet bill.  It’s a soft-tissue injury (like a sprain or a strain).  She’s got pain meds and she’s supposed to stay off it for five to seven days.  The problem is, the pain meds are working too well and Aliza doesn’t see any reason to rest. 

So, here’s hoping August is well and truly over this time.

Back to writing in my next post, I promise.

Small Celebration

Now that the calendar says it’s officially over, I was going to post about “Awful August” today.  Well, maybe I’ll save that for Sunday.  (You have figured out that I post on Wednesdays and Sundays, right?)  Today, I’m going to celebrate.  It’s not a big celebration, but you’ve got to take what you can get. 

I just finished Chapter 9 of MAGE STORM.  This is a new chapter added as part of the second draft and it had me stopped earlier in the week.  I knew what needed to happen in this chapter; two characters who weren’t friends before become friends partly by virtue of working together against the antagonist.  But I didn’t know the details.  It’s really hard to write a scene, let alone three or four, without those pesky little details. 

I got the first part of the chapter written and then just stared at the # where the next scene was supposed to start.  Nothing. 

Ideas come to me best when I’m writing.  Not necessarily right when I’m sitting with my fingers on the keyboard, but when I’m spending enough time writing every day to keep the juices flowing.  So, I set MAGE STORM aside for a day or two.  I worked on some back-logged revisions to DREAMER’S ROSE.  I revised my latest short story. 

Then I came back to MAGE STORM.  Still nothing.  I started the scene anyway.  Even if I haven’t figured out the details, I know where it takes place and who’s there.  Those things have to be set up anyway.  Before I had that paragraph done, more was coming to me.  I just now typed the last few sentences.  I like it.  And now I can move on with the rest of the second draft.

Yay!

I’m approaching the half-way mark on the second draft of MAGE STORM.  It’s going really well, so far.  I had a lot of fun writing a scene where the main character gets attacked by a griffin.  But the pace is about to slow down.

I’m at the point, now, where I need to start building the conflict with the antagonist.  This is where using a single point of view is making things difficult.  In other books, by this time I would have introduced two or three scenes from the antagonist’s point of view.  That makes it easy to show what the antagonist wants and what he’s willing to do to get it.  This one is entirely from the point of view of the main character, so I can’t do that.  It’s posing a bit of a problem.

I can work in the antagonist’s motivation, but not for several more chapters.  The antagonist isn’t going to monologue in front of the main character (who he thinks he has duped), so the only way the protagonist can find out about it is from a third character who knew the antagonist way back when.  That character won’t be introduced for three or four more chapters.  Meanwhile, the antagonist just has to be a confusing and occasionally menacing presence.  Well, for at least another chapter or two, before something happens that strips the mask away.  Even then, the main character won’t understand why the antagonist would do something like that.  Of course, that inability to understand can be used to make the antagonist just that much more scary for a while, so it’s not altogether a bad thing.

This, unfortunately, is probably going to take more than this draft to get really right, but it’s really necessary for this story to work.

Yesterday, I finally got back to MAGE STORM.  I know, I know, I said back to new writitng.  But there’s so much material that needs to be added in the second draft, it’s really more new writing than revisions. 

So far, in fact, I’m pretty happy with everything that I wrote in the first draft.  The first couple of pages have gotten good responses on the new David Farland’s Writers’ Groups, so I think I’m on the right track.  There are just a number of places that need to be expanded, which is almost the same as writing the first draft, except this time I have a much more detailed structure to work in.  That’s what I’m focusing on in this draft.

  1. I need to expand the main character’s journey a little at the beginning.  He needs a few more adventures before he arrives at what he thinks is his destination.  This will give him a reason to be glad to get there and not notice that there’s something fishy for a couple of days.  It will also give me a chance to foreshadow the existence of certain creatures in this world so they don’t just pop out of nowhere in the last third of the book.
  2. I need to spend more time developing the friendships between the main character and his sidekicks. 
  3. I really need to spend more time developing the antagonist, his menace, and his motives.  I know what they are.  I need to put it in the story.  This is typical for me between the first and second drafts.  I almost always concentrate on the main character in the first draft and neglect his opposition.  The antagonist gets better treatment in the second draft.
  4. I think I need to spend a little more time with the mentor character, too.  I just have to do it in a way that doesn’t slow down the plot too much.
  5. I need to bring out the inherent conflict that remains in the falling action after the climax.  It’s there.  It gets resolved.  I just haven’t fully developed it in the first draft.

So, that’s mostly new writing, even if it is a second draft.

Meanwhile, I’m continuing revisions on DREAMER’S ROSE (which may end up getting recast into a YA novel, too) and THE IGNORED PROPHECY, as well as one of my short stories.

This post is likely to grow throughout the next day or two as I have time and inspiration.

  1. My favorite author is Lois McMaster Bujold.  Her kind of storytelling, her damaged protagonists who have to overcome their own limitations as well as the external obstacles–that’s the kind of story I want to be able to write when I grow up.  Well, I could do a lot worse than as a role model than a multiple Hugo and Nebula award winner, right?
  2. I am a dyed-in-the-wool animal lover, although I do exclude things with six or more legs.  I’ve been known to rescue lizards and birds.  You tend to get funny looks when you arrive and say “Sorry I’m late.  I had to rescue a lizard.”  It’s bad enough that when it came to the place in THE IGNORED PROPHECY where I intended to kill off one of the dogs, I couldn’t do it.  It was harder than killing a character. 
  3. This is on my “About Me” page, but I’ll put it here, too.  My sport and therapy is dog agility.  It’s a sport where your dog is your team mate.  The human is intended to be the leader of the team.   (Corgis are bossy dogs by nature and sometimes that position is disputed.  I am still the only one that can read the course map, though.)  My job is to help the  dog run an obstacle course, composed primarily of things the dog has to climb over, jump over, or run through.  The obstacles all have to be performed correctly and in the right order, within a time limit.  Dogs run off leash and the handler may not touch the dog or the obstacles.  All of the instructions are communicated by voice and body language.  It’s a heck of a lot of fun for both me and the dogs.  You should see the grin my older girl gets when we play.  (Corgis are also a breed that needs a job.  Agility works very well and it helps keep them in shape, too.)
  4. Greatest time wasters that keep me away from writing:  Obsessively checking my e-mail, forums, web comics, and blog statistics.  (Sad, really sad.)  Playing stupid (and old) computer games.  Not even the new, hot ones.  Reading, when I’m into a really good book (not the case right now).
  5. When my evenings aren’t as messed up as they currently are, I frequently embroider while watching television.  Otherwise, television has a tendency to put me to sleep.  About half the time, I design my own embroidery patterns.  Almost everything that is hanging on the walls of this house has been embroidered by me.
  6. There’s a harp in my closet.  Not the kind you see in the orchestra.  That’s a pedal harp.  Mine’s neo-Celtic, which means it’s patterned after the celtic harps, but it has monofilament strings instead of gut and has been updated with sharping levers.  (Sharping levers do essentially the same thing pedals on the big orchestra harp do.  They allow you to change the length, and therefore the pitch of individual strings.  This is to mimic, as closely as the harp is able, the white and black strings of the piano, so it’s possible to play more modern music.)  I haven’t actually played the harp in a while.  In fact, not seriously since my father died.  That’s almost eleven years ago.  It’s time.  I’ve lost the calluses on my fingers.   Here’s a resolution (and it’s not even New Year’s), I’m going to take that harp out, tune it, and play at least a couple of carols this Christmas.  How’s that?
  7. I garden organically.  Although, around here, gardening could be classified more as sticking my finger in the dike than anything you’re likely to see in one of those glossy gardening magazines.  The yard’s just too big for one person to take care of, unfortunately.

There.  That’s seven.  Later on, I’m going to move this post to my About Me page.

Versatile Blog AwardAnn, of the Shadows in Mind blog has awarded me the Versatile Blogger Award.  Thank you, Ann.

According to Ann, this comes with the following responsibilities:

  1. Thank the one who gave me the award.
  2. Share seven things about myself.
  3. Present the award to 15 other bloggers.
  4. Drop by and share my appreciation with those others.

I’ve already thanked Ann.  I’ll get to the rest in future blogs.